Thank you for submitting the rough draft of you final essay, the commentary. I will not be marking the errors as before, but I will provide a list of things that you should ensure are done correctly on your essay in order to earn the highest grade you possibly can on the final draft. You should look back at the feedback on the first two rough drafts of the first two essays. For any targeted mistake areas for you, read your commentary draft carefully, looking for those types of errors and fix them before submitting the essay. This is part of the growth process as a writer. Let me know if you have any questions.—Dr. B
2. Ensure the essay has a proper title.
3. Remove all first/second person pronouns and contractions.
4. Respond to the assignment properly, choosing one of the trends I listed in DQ 3 of Week Five.
5. Ensure your thesis statement is in proper format and then that each body paragraph covers one of the previewed points in the thesis statement.
6. Check internal citations and ensure they are done correctly. Use the six Citations Help documents under Instructor Add Ons for guidance.
7. Ensure the essay has five scholarly sources.
8. Ensure the essay follows the outline below:
9. In this last essay, here is what you are writing about: choose one of the trends listed under Week Five DQ 3 (my answer immediately under the DQ). Then you are going to need at least five scholarly sources to use as support for what you say.
10. Your thesis statement should be very much like this: The hidden dangers of ADHD medication include the possibilities of accidental overdose, intentional misuse, and adverse reactions to certain drugs for some.
11. It is important for you to ensure that your thesis statement contain at least three reasons you believe the trend exists or three evidences that it exists. Those three to five reasons are a preview of what your essay’s body paragraphs will be about.
12. The thesis statement should be the last sentence of the introduction paragraph. Please spend the introduction talking about the trend, not about looking for information or about what it is like for someone to have ADHD. Remember, too, that all paragraphs require at least five sentences.
13. The topic (first) sentence of the first body paragraph could be: First, the medications often used with ADHD might be involved in accidental overdosing.
14. Then, you write only about that danger that paragraph–what it is, why it is important, and where and how it might occur.
15. Your second and third body paragraph each cover each of the other dangers, the same way I explained the first hidden danger.
16. The conclusion should revisit the main points (such as the thesis statement and topic sentences), not by repeating them but by restating them in different words. All paragraphs require at least five sentences, and the conclusion should begin with an appropriate word or phrase that indicates the essay is wrapping up (such as All in all).