Revise the essay based on the comments, must follow the instruction and steps,
1. Where does this information come from? You should cite any statistics you use, but you also shouldn’t use any outside sources for this paper. You should just talk in general about immigration.
2. You are using a lot of the same language the article uses. You need to say this in your own words.
3. You have some great ideas here, but because your paragraph structure is unclear, the development of your ideas is also unclear. When you analyze, make sure you take the target audience into consideration.
Does Immigration Influence Country Immensely
1. 45 million is the number of immigrants living in United States today, accounting nearly 15 percent of the population. With the rapid development of American economy, more immigrants are attracted to the America from all the wakes of the world. Therefore, if immigration will affect American’s life is a great concern to many people. Samuel Huntington, author of “ One Nation, Out of Many: Why Americanization of Newcomers Is still Important”, professor of political science at Harvard, shows his strongly disagree of immigration and he claims that too much immigration has perverse effects on culture, political and economic. What’s more, he believes that Republican needs to be responsible for the immigration policy. However, the article is not very effective because the author doesn’t give us enough evidence to prove how immigrants affect American perversely.
Since the First World War, many immigrants flood into America. Such a huge wave of immigrants, make the country’s culture become a “ tossed salad”. The massive dilution of the American culture is against their interests. Huntington also gives us an example of Mexico because the number of the immigrants increases substantially. The massive inflow of immigrants from Mexico is attributable to a number of factors that include the 2.proximity of their country of origin, their geographical concentration within U.S, the enthusiasm of the American elites for multiculturalism, bilingualism, affirmative action, as well as cultural diversity instead of the cultural unity. (Huntington, 14) Moreover, the author argues, “ Liberal elites weaken American cultural identity and strengthen racial and other identities”. (Huntington, 8) In addition, the author wants to tell Republican that the immigration policy makes American’s culture be messed up with other cultures so he wants Republican to stop or limit immigrant. Huntington shows his fears and challenges of current immigration situation.
As identified by Huntington, immigrants had immense effect on the country’s cultures, politics and economics but he doesn’t give any evidence to support his opinions. He notes that if the immigration of the Mexican to U.S were stopped, though the southwest agriculture and other business would be disrupted, the wage of low-income earners would rise (Huntington, 15). Huntington thinks that stopping immigration will help low income groups. However, Why the wage of low incomes would rise after stopping immigration? He doesn’t give any explanations or examples to prove the relationship between immigration and local’s income. On the other hand, if southwest business were disrupted, will it really help low-income groups? Or will it really help American ‘s economy developing?
Huntington doesn’t explain any of the questions. On the other hand, the author believes that too many Spanish speakers may influence American politics. “A large, distinct, Spanish speaker groups could be political resources sufficient to sustain its own Hispanic identity”. (Huntington, 17) This is also not convincible. Although it is truth that there are many Spanish speakers living in America today, Huntington doesn’t mention or name any Spanish groups that influence American politics and how they influence American’s politics. Moreover, he just mention an example of Spanish language television station which is unsusceptible of explaining that Spanish speakers influence politics.
In Huntington’s article, he has a very logical organization. Firstly, he gives us a background of immigration in American history, with very specific time line. Since the First World War, the first immigration wave to America. Then, at first 19 century, many public schools are created to “Americanize and Protestant” immigrants. Until 20 century “National identity began to fade. The author follow the time very carefully to introduce the background of American immigration history and situation. After that, the author tries to use cause and effect organization to support his perspectives. Because of the immigration, American’s culture becomes a “tossed salad”. Similar effects also happened in economics and politics. Huntington gives an example of Mexican immigration to explain how immigration has negative effects on these sides.
Consequently, Huntington resent with the immigrants policy in America because it has defects on cultures, politics and economics. What’s more, he claims that Republican needs to stop or limit immigration. However, the author doesn’t give us enough example or statistics to prove his perspectives, why and how immigration has defects on these sides so some of the ideas are unconvicing.
Samuel Huntington. One Nation, Out of Many: Why “Americanization” of Newcomers Is Still Important. Timothy W. Crusius and Carolyn E. Channell. The Aims of Argument. (8th Edition.) (329-332). New York.