Revise a Formal Memo ???? ????FORMAL MEMO: Revise a formal memo to improve the “You-Attitude.” See Unit 2, Module 6, p. 99Imagine you are a manager in an office building undergoing some renovations. A member of your staff writes the following memo:Subject: Status of Building Renovations We are happy to announce that the renovation of the lobby is not behind schedule. By Monday, October 9, we should be ready to open the west end of the lobby to limited traffic. The final phase of the renovation will be placing a new marble floor in front of the elevators. This work will not be finished until the end of the month. Please exercise caution when moving through the construction area. The floor will be uneven and steps will be at unusual heights.
Watch your step to avoid accidental tripping or falling. Failure to pay attention can result in injury or worse, so don’t walk and text or read your phone while moving in this area.While not a poorly written memo, grammatically speaking, there are many ways this memo can be revised to reflect principles discussed in LO 6.1 – LO 6.5. See, too, the sample letter on p. 95 as it also lacks the “You-Attitude.” Note: Do not just add words. Revise what is here for the “You-Attitude.”Here are some examples of sentences revised for the You Attitude:
2. Write a Formal EmailUSING READER BENEFITS: Write an Email to a Potential Customer. See Unit 2, Module 8, Activity 8.10, p. 121Imagine you are now working as a manager or owner of a business in your field. You have been given a lead to a person who may be interested in contracting your company or hiring your services. For example, if you are a health care, you want that person to visit your office to encourage the person to use your facility. If you are in sports management, you want that person to employ your services. If you in Homeland Security, you want that person to hire your company to strengthen his or her company’s security apparatus. Be creative, but realistic. In your email to the individual, be sure to anticipate and address feelings, fears, or needs that may have motivated him or her to reach out to your office/company/institution. Be sure to identify the features you offer and how those could benefit him or her. Reference all of Module 8 and in particular, see the examples in LO 8-3.Ensure your email is: