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1.Revise this thesis statement. Include the main topics that you would cover in an essay; then write an introduction in which the thesis statement appears at the end.

Thesis: My essay is about the price of college. I will discuss how it is too high.

2.Below is an introduction that gets right to the point. It does not, however, grab the interest of readers likely to read articles on exercise. Rewrite this introduction twice, using two different strategies from the list below.

Exercise is important. Unfortunately, too few Americans get enough daily exercise. If Americans would commit to exercising for twenty minutes, three times a week, they would see individual benefits like weight reduction, reduced stress, and improved productivity. They would also see social benefits like decreased health costs and greater civility.

Strategies for Writing Introductions

-Tell a story. Stories from history or personal experience engage our interest and our emotions.

-Quote someone else. A poetic statement can provoke readers to think; a thoughtful statement from an expert can signal that others share your view.

-Pose a question. A provocative question readers would like to answer can encourage them to read on.

-Describe a situation. A few vivid descriptions can engage readers’ imaginations.

-Offer a surprising fact or statistic. Information that shows the seriousness of the issue can make readers feel a duty

3.What did you do today?  Write a short essay that describes your day using chronological order.  When you finish, write a new version of the essay below the first that instead uses importance organization.

4.Consider the following title, introductory paragraph, and conclusion of a composition that you have been asked to peer review. Note that the body paragraphs between the introduction and conclusion are not shown here.

[Title and introductory paragraph]

The End of an Era

Since the early civilizations, humans on this planet have communicated in various different ways resulting in global change hoping for the better, but usually ending up being worse. Communication has served as a medium linking isolated communities to big cities. In the twenty first century, the internet has equipped mankind to connect to one another simultaneously for the first time in world history. With this incredible discovery, the desire to connect and interact with individuals has become a reality when social networks began to spawn up all over the world. These technologies have displayed the ability to do great things, but the truth is the more time spent in front of the laptop, on the cellular phone, or anything blocking the portal to reality we live in will soon be lost in translation.

5.The following is the third paragraph of a composition.  Revise the paragraph to improve its organization, unity, coherence, and development.

Isaiah and I were still amazed from all the glorious paintings and pictures we just saw, so we said to ourselves, less looking and more screaming! So we started to look for our first roller coaster. As soon as we saw our first roller coaster, it was amazing. We looked up and saw that it was called the Mine Train. We didn’t know what the ride did, but as I heard someone talking, someone said, “the ride is amazing man! Over 50mph on the cart and a huge drop at the end!” I then grabbed my friend Isaiah as he was still starring and trying to figure out what the Mine Train was. We went to the line and try to wait patiently. We waited and waited then finally, we were up next! I stepped into the cart and I was so excited that I felt I won free candy for life. When I heard the guy controlling the roller coaster said. “alright everyone who’s all ready for the Mine Train!'” I yelled at the top of my lungs and said “YES!” When the roller coaster started, a big smile came on my face. I looked at Isaiah and I saw him with the same thing. The roller coaster started and it was really smooth at first. I asked myself why is this going so slow. Then all of a sudden it picked up. “Whoa!” I yelled. It picked up so fast that my head went back and hit the seat. The roller coaster was now at top speed doing fifty degree angles every five seconds, then it stopped. The roller coaster now came to a complete stop and then we started going up. “Isaiah this is it get ready!” As we were going up. I knew this was the big moment. The big drop was coming. When the roller coaster came to the top, it went down so fast that my skin on my face felt like it was coming off. The wind was brushing my skin. The excitement was now here! For about thirty seconds of that intense fast drop, the ride came to an end. When Isaiah and I got off the ride, I was the happiest kid alive. We then explored for more rides. We walked for about ten minutes and then Isaiah pointed out a ride called the Runaway Mountain. It sounded cool to us so we got in line. When we got on the cart Isaiah was really scared because it was a ride where you couldn’t see anything while riding the roller coaster. Isaiah then got over it and got in the same cart as me. As we were going up we couldn’t see anything. It was pitch black as if someone tied a thick towel over our faces. So when the roller coaster came to a stop, it went down so fast it scared the heck out of Isaiah and I. We couldn’t tell where the roller coaster was taking us. and that’s when it got fun! When it came to a stop Isaiah and I were pretty freaked out and excited at the same time. The rides here at this park are full of thrill and fun but it’s not fun when you don’t go with your friends or family.

6.The following essay contains five paragraphs that each contain five errors in grammar, punctuation, mechanics, or usage. Copy and paste the essay, and then revise to correct the errors.

Flannery O’Connor’s short story, The Train, was published in 1948; her first novel, whose first chapter is drawn from “The Train,” was published in 1952. The distance her work evolved is clear from its opening sentence. That distance is most easily calculated through a comparison of the novel with O’Connor’s five published stories, which were labeled as chapters of a novel in progress.

Her first novel differs dramatically from the stories in both style and theme, the prose of the novel is simpler and stronger, O’Connor finds in it the narrative tone which she continued to employ in her later fiction. More important the novel demonstrates that, in the process of writing her first novel, O’Connor was discovering those themes that were to be central to all her later fiction; the questions of vision and salvation.

Both “The train” and the first chapter of the novel, placed the central character at the beginning of a quest, but the shape of that quest is very different in the two versions. The young Haze Wickers equipped with a neutral name that will change to Hazel Weaver in a later story and finally, in the novel, to Hazel Motes, is on board a train moving toward his new home. After discharge from the army. He is entirely preoccupied with the past.

Haze is first concerned with the porter, whom he believes is from his hometown of Eastrod (and O’Connor provides us with enough evidence that we believe it, too.) He is concerned with making conversation with a fellow passenger Mrs. Wallace Ben Hosen, because “his mother had always started up a conversation with the other people on a train.” Haze Wickers would like things to be as they were: He would like to be back in Eastrod and being comforted by his mother’s values. Without his home and his mother, he has no sense of who he is or where he fit in.

Haze knows that Eastrod, no longer exists and that his mother is dead, but on his last furlough he returned to the deserted town anyway, sleeping in the old house. It takes rejection by both the porter and Mrs. Hosen to jolt Haze into the realization that he is indeed homeless, isolated. At the end of the story, Haze abandoned by the porter in his windowless berth, feels a nausea that is not simply the result of having bolted down his dinner earlier in the dining car, he recognizes that he is completely cut off from everything familiar.

7.Locate two complex professional documents (such as reports, brochures, sets of instructions, and fact sheets) online. Choose samples that incorporate design elements such as visuals, coloring and shading, text boxes, or marginalia, in addition to more common format elements like line spacing, highlighting, font size, and margins. Cut and paste the URL to these two documents into the writing space.

Then, under each URL, write an analysis of each document in turn. First, critique each document’s overall effectiveness in terms of format and design. Second, explain what format and design elements each document uses and what purposes these elements serve. Finally, explain some ways you might format and design each document differently, either to make it overall more effective or to make it work just as well but in a different way.