The following sentences are discourteous, boastful, excessively humble, vague, or lacking the “you attitude.” Rewrite them to correct those mistakes.
A. Something is obviously wrong in your head office. They have once more sent me the wrong model number. Can they ever get things straight?
B. My instructor wants me to do a term paper on safely regulations at a small plant. Since you are the manager of a small plant, send me the information I need at once. My grade depends heavily on all this.
C. It is apparent that you are in business to rip off the public.
D. I was wondering if you possibly see your way into sending me the local chapter president’s name and address-if you have the time, that is.
E. I have waited for my conformation for two weeks now. Do you expect me to wait forever, or can I get some action?
F. It goes without saying that we cannot honor your request?
G. May I take just a moment of your valuable time to point out that our hours for the next three weeks will change, and we trust and pray that no one in your agency will be terribly inconvenienced by this.
H. Your application has been received and will be kept on file for six months. If we are interested in you, we will notify you. If you do not hear from us, please do not write us again.
I. My past performance a medical technologist had left nothing to be desired.
J. Credit means a lot to some people. But obviously you do not care about yours. If you did, you would you have sent us the $249.95 you rightfully owe us three months ago. What’s wrong with you?
Write a business letter and submit an appropriate envelope with your letter, with the following information.
The Director of food services on campus asking for EITHER more ethnic/regional meals, more healthy meals, or more special diet meals (such as gluten-free, vegan, or paleo, etc.)
Revise the following poor resume to make it more precise and persuasive. Include additional details where necessary and exclude any detail that would hurt the job seeker’s chances. Also correct any inconsistencies. You may add more information to the resume.
Powell T. Harrison
8604 So. Kirkpartick
345 37 8760
614 234 4587
CAREER Seek god paying position with progressive Sunbelt Company
2010-2012 Will receive degree from Central Tech. Institute in Arch. St. Earned high average last semester. Took necessary courses for major; interested in system, plans, and design development.
2008-2010 Attended Ardville High School, Ardville, OH; took all courses required. Served on several students committees.
EXPERICENES None, except for numerous part-time jobs and student apprenticeship in the Ardville area. As part of the student app. Worked with the local firm two months.
HOBBIES Surfing the Net, paying Nintendo DSI, Member of Junior Achievement.
REFERENCES Please write for names and address